The world can radically change if we reduce motor vehicle usage. It will be a real revolution with incomputable positive effects. Cars are currently generating an enormous amount of pollution, which constitutes a clear danger for people. In a relatively brief period of time, the accumulation of harmful gases in the atmosphere has exceeded the normal levels. All opinions about this issue are uniform - pollution should be ceased. The situation needs to be amended. And we can do that with minimal efforts. We just have to change our ideology. Albeit we are addicted to the comfort of automobiles, many people are convinced that instead of cars we can use horse carts like our predecessors did. Other people don鈥檛 consent to use horse carts and they have an objective reason - motor vehicle are more practical and faster. They just cannot visualize themselves in the role of coachman. However, in some parts of the world, like in Sardinia, the usage of horse carts has already been implemented. It was drafted a law that makes carts and automobiles have an equivalent status. The usage of horse carts inhibits air pollution and noise pollution. Moreover, the usage of horse carts is attracting a lot of tourists and thereby it is one of the principal components of the eco-tourism Business in the island. In many European TV channels this innovation was cited as the ideal formula against pollution.
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Can you find 5 words that are not used correctly in the following passage?
Line 6: %26quot;Pollution should be ceased.%26quot;
Correction: Pollution must cease.
Line 6: %26quot;And we can do that with minimal efforts.%26quot;
Correction: In formal writing, it is best not to begin a sentince with a conjunction such as and, or, but, etc. Remove the word %26quot;and%26quot;.
Line 8: %26quot;Albeit we are addicted to the comfort of automobiles...%26quot;
Correction: %26quot;Although we are addicted to the comfort of automobiles...%26quot;
[Albeit is not commonly used as the first word in a sentence, and even though it is used in an introductory clause, the wording just seems awkward...]
Line 8: %26quot;Albeit we are addicted to the comfort of automobiles...%26quot;
Correction: Are you talking about the way we feel ABOUT using automobiles, or the way we feel when we are IN them? Saying %26quot;the comfort of automobiles%26quot; gives the impression of the amount of comfort provided when one is in an automobile, which I don't believe is the effect you were going for...
Line 10: %26quot;Other people don't consent...%26quot;
Correction: I think you may mean other people don't agree that the shift from cars to horse-carts would even be a debatable option. To say they don't consent means you asked them to switch, and they refused.
-- That was five words, but here is one more note... You used the word %26quot;just%26quot; a good number of times, and in formal writing, the word %26quot;just%26quot; is generally viewed as too comfortable and, well, informal. You may wanted to revise the paragraph and change or remove some of those extra ones. :) --
